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		<title>please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story?</title>
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		<pubDate>Mon, 31 Oct 2011 05:36:37 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description><![CDATA[Question: please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story? It was going on 7:55 , Joshua, Emma , Jennifer, Brad , and Johnson heard the school bell ring. Their first class of the day was a bout to begin. Brad swigged the last of his diet Pepsi, and threw the can into the garbage. [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><strong><i>Question</i>: please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story?</strong><br />
It was going on 7:55 , Joshua, Emma , Jennifer, Brad , and Johnson heard the school bell ring. Their first class of the day was a bout to begin. Brad swigged the last of his diet Pepsi, and threw the can into the garbage. It was time for Algebra II , the five students were happy to be in the same class.<br />
     After school the fivesome were walking to Emma&#8217;s house and a pack of bullies appeared. One knocked the books out of Brads hands and and another knocked the books out of Joshua&#8217;s hand. They turned beet red, the three girls looked on horrified. Brad suddenly raised his hands to the sky , chanted a special magic word grouping and a lighning bolt came and struck the pavemnet right in front of the bullies. They turned and ran.</p>
<p><strong>Answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by apple ?</i><br/>I think it deserves one big</p>
<p>LOL!</p>
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		<title>please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story?</title>
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		<pubDate>Mon, 31 Oct 2011 05:36:37 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description><![CDATA[by Feuillu Question: please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story? It was going on 7:55 , Joshua, Emma , Jennifer, Brad , and Johnson heard the school bell ring. Their first class of the day was a bout to begin. Brad swigged the last of his diet Pepsi, and threw the can into [...]]]></description>
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<p><strong><i>Question</i>: please rate this segment of my &#8220;fantasy-science fiction&#8221; story?</strong><br />
It was going on 7:55 , Joshua, Emma , Jennifer, Brad , and Johnson heard the school bell ring. Their first class of the day was a bout to begin. Brad swigged the last of his diet Pepsi, and threw the can into the garbage. It was time for Algebra II , the five students were happy to be in the same class.<br />
     After school the fivesome were walking to Emma&#8217;s house and a pack of bullies appeared. One knocked the books out of Brads hands and and another knocked the books out of Joshua&#8217;s hand. They turned beet red, the three girls looked on horrified. Brad suddenly raised his hands to the sky , chanted a special magic word grouping and a lighning bolt came and struck the pavemnet right in front of the bullies. They turned and ran.</p>
<p><strong>Answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by apple ?</i><br/>I think it deserves one big</p>
<p>LOL!</p>
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		<title>Am I the only one who didn&#8217;t like &#8220;Pulp Fiction&#8221;? Please tell me I&#8217;m not?</title>
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		<pubDate>Wed, 26 Oct 2011 15:36:29 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description><![CDATA[by Air Force One Question: Am I the only one who didn&#8217;t like &#8220;Pulp Fiction&#8221;? Please tell me I&#8217;m not? Answer: Answer by William DI did like the movie, but it is not as great as many people claim it to be. I like how the movie jumps from one time to another it makes [...]]]></description>
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<p><strong><i>Question</i>: Am I the only one who didn&#8217;t like &#8220;Pulp Fiction&#8221;? Please tell me I&#8217;m not?</strong></p>
<p><strong>Answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by William D</i><br/>I did like the movie, but it is not as great as many people claim it to be.</p>
<p>I like how the movie jumps from one time to another it makes you think. Then the second time you watch it you can put it all together.</p>
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		<title>Christians: Can you in your own words please define the following: &#8220;Theory&#8221;, &#8220;Fact&#8221;,&#8221;Fiction&#8221;, &#8220;Hypothesis&#8221;?</title>
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		<description><![CDATA[Question: Christians: Can you in your own words please define the following: &#8220;Theory&#8221;, &#8220;Fact&#8221;,&#8221;Fiction&#8221;, &#8220;Hypothesis&#8221;? No wikipedia stuff! Oh jeeez!! you again@ Maximum Bob!! Answer: Answer by CogitoErgoCogitoSumAsking theists to educate you, are we? I bet you cannot even answer that. I bet you have no clue how much of &#8220;science&#8221; is taken on &#8220;faith&#8221; [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><strong><i>Question</i>: Christians: Can you in your own words please define the following: &#8220;Theory&#8221;, &#8220;Fact&#8221;,&#8221;Fiction&#8221;, &#8220;Hypothesis&#8221;?</strong><br />
No wikipedia stuff!<br />
Oh jeeez!! you again@ Maximum Bob!!</p>
<p><strong>Answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by CogitoErgoCogitoSum</i><br/>Asking theists to educate you, are we?</p>
<p>I bet you cannot even answer that.  I bet you have no clue how much of &#8220;science&#8221; is taken on &#8220;faith&#8221; because its &#8220;observed&#8221; to be true.  Which is no different than what theists do.  The exception is that bigoted anti-theistic atheists, like yourself, have closed your minds off to any alternative possibility&#8230; no matter how true.</p>
<p>Short of the bitter choice not to believe, what purely logical reason do you have for completely discounting theistic possibility? If you were really rational and educated, you wouldnt arbitrarily and nonchalantly disregard any possibility before it was conclusively disproven.</p>
<p>There is a significant difference between the happenstance of not believing and choosing not to believe&#8230;. rather, choosing to disbelieve.  Not believing and disbelieving are two separate statements.  A lack of evidence to one theory doesnt prove its contrary.</p>
<p>Atheism is about a lack of faith&#8230; an entire lack of faith.  The statement that you believe no one way because you have yet to be convinced.  Believing against religion is not atheism&#8230; it is a specific belief to one end.  Arbitrarily defaulting to whatever train of thought or belief structure you were taught or that you &#8220;feel&#8221; more comfortable with is a form of bias.</p>
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		<title>Q&amp;A: Python Programmers? HW help please?</title>
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		<description><![CDATA[Question: Python Programmers? HW help please? Is there anyone good at Python Programming? Specifically using IDLE for windows? (2.6) I Have a basic assignment regarding calculating a restaurant tip with which I am having difficulties. &#8220;Input information in a program using standard input: use the command raw_input(&#8220;String&#8221;) where &#8220;String&#8221; will be printed on the screen [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><strong><i>Question</i>: Python Programmers? HW help please?</strong><br />
Is there anyone good at Python Programming? Specifically using IDLE for windows? (2.6) I Have a basic assignment regarding calculating a restaurant tip with which I am having difficulties.</p>
<p>&#8220;Input information in a program using standard input: use the command raw_input(&#8220;String&#8221;) where &#8220;String&#8221; will be printed on the screen (corresponds to the question asked); raw_input returns a string; if you expect a real number, just add float.<br />
Example: x = float(raw_input(&#8220;Enter the value for x : &#8220;))<br />
Output information on the screen: just use print;<br />
Example: print &#8220;The value of x is :&#8221;,x,&#8221;\n&#8221; </p>
<p>Remember to test your program! To do this using IDLE:</p>
<p>From the &#8220;Run&#8221; menu, choose &#8220;Run module&#8221;. This should start the program, taking you back to the main IDLE window.</p>
<p>Problem 1: dealing with numbers</p>
<p>Write a Python program that reads from standard input the amount of a restaurant bill and outputs two options for tipping, one based on 15% of the bill, the other based on 20% of the bill.&#8221;</p>
<p>Anyone care to help? thanks</p>
<p>I wrote this but it doesn&#8217;t work (I have to show that is runs as well, so I made up a bill total):<br />
x=float(raw_input(&#8220;Enter the bill total:23.50&#8243;))<br />
x=a.split(&#8220;$  &#8220;)<br />
print &#8220;You should pay&#8221;,&#8221;$  &#8220;+str(float(x[1])*.15), &#8220;for a 15% tip&#8221;<br />
print &#8220;You should pay&#8221;,&#8221;$  &#8220;+str(float(x[1])*.2), &#8220;for a 20% tip&#8221;</p>
<p>In the interpreter window of IDLE, the program doesn&#8217;t run, not even in the python shell window.<br />
i think my problem is with the user input  -> raw_input(&#8220;Enter number: &#8220;)</p>
<p><strong>Answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by Tay K</i><br/>Yes, it&#8217;s a problem with evaluating input. You shouldn&#8217;t have to do anything with a.split(&#8220;$  &#8220;). Just deal with the first x that you assigned there.</p>
<p>x = float(raw_input(&#8220;Enter the bill total:&#8221;))</p>
<p>There&#8217;s no need to do anything besides that.</p>
<p>Also, when putting together a string it&#8217;s often a good idea to use Python&#8217;s string formatting features. In my example below I use string formatting to avoid issues with the spaces inserted by print.</p>
<p>print &#8220;You should pay $  %f for a %%15 tip&#8221; % x *.15</p>
<p>With string formatting it&#8217;s often clearer what&#8217;s happening.</p>
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		<title>can some one please help me to analyze the fiction &#8220;the Giver&#8221; by Lois Lowry?</title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 09 Nov 2010 02:37:52 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description><![CDATA[Question by LG: can some one please help me to analyze the fiction &#8220;the Giver&#8221; by Lois Lowry? I want to see some one&#8217;s perspective on , &#8221; how does Jonas&#8217; personality change through out the novel? Just how I can see the changes in Jonas&#8217; action and thoughts Best answer: Answer by Prairie FireIf [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><strong><i>Question by LG</i>: can some one please help me to analyze the fiction &#8220;the Giver&#8221; by Lois Lowry?</strong><br />
I want to see some one&#8217;s perspective on , &#8221; how does Jonas&#8217; personality change through out the novel?</p>
<p>Just how I can see the changes in Jonas&#8217; action and thoughts</p>
<p><strong>Best answer:</strong></p>
<p><i>Answer by Prairie Fire</i><br/>If I remember correctly, Jonas becomes more cynical and not so accepting as he learns the truth about the society he lives in.</p>
<p><strong>What do you think? Answer below!</strong></p>
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		<title>Can someone please give an idea for a creative writing newspaper article. It has to be fiction.?</title>
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		<title>Anyone who is good at writing fiction please read this!!?</title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 11 May 2010 06:50:37 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description><![CDATA[I am writing a short story for english in the form of a diary, but my teacher said it would be really clever if i was able to put in parts that aren&#8217;t written in the diary. does anyone know how to do this and is able to give me an example? P.S. answer as [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I am writing a short story for english in the form of a diary, but my teacher said it would be really clever if i was able to put in parts that aren&#8217;t written in the diary. does anyone know how to do this and is able to give me an example?</p>
<p>P.S. answer as quick as possible i have to write most of tonight please!!</p>
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		<title>Can somebody please recommend to me a book that is good and appropriate for a 6th grader?</title>
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		<pubDate>Mon, 10 May 2010 21:50:41 +0000</pubDate>
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			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I have a sister who&#8217;s in 6th grade and we&#8217;re having a hard time finding a book for her that she likes and appropriate for her. She likes science fiction and adventure books. Any suggestions?</p>
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		<title>please review and help me with this short fiction story i wrote?</title>
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			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>it is set in WW1 and i wil include it in additional details so refresh if it is not there, I no it is not grammar perfect but that is because there is no spell check on this computer and will finish that at later date, I just wish to know what you think overall<br />
It was scary. Advancing under our own artillery. with shells bursting only yards infront of us. We must seem like sitting ducks out here, while walking at such a slow pace. I can see the sergeant of a bit yelling something but I cannot here him over the artillery, I must wait for it to be repeated closer to me. It seems you are unable to see 20 yards infront of us we may be right on the kaiser&#8217;s doorstep and not know it.<br />
The creeping barage seems to have stopped for the moment we must be close. I judge we have walked about 400 yards. to this point, which should be about a hundred yards short of the germans&#8217; first line. A jerry, which enlisted with the british army finally got the sergeant&#8217;s message to me &#8221; the sergeant says we&#8217;re 150 yar&#8230;&#8221; he was stopped as a german land mine disemboled him. knocked to my knees and elbows by the blast I could hardly here as the man next to me tried to help me up. I didn&#8217;t know this man, but he knew my name as he lift me up he said &#8220;C&#8217;mon, Chad you don&#8217;t want to get your uniform dirty first day back, now&#8221;<br />
I now remembered the hospital. It was horrible the screams of French, American and British alike filled the air all night. I couldn&#8217;t take it anymore. I had myself reassigned as soon as I could<br />
&#8220;I came back just for this&#8221; I mumbled to the private. The creeping barage finally moved up about 50 yards just as  we enclosed only feet from the shell bursts. As I looked down the line I noticed we had lost multiple soldiers to our own shells. There seemed to be gun fire down the line. As the smoke cleared enough I could now see the german lines. Only 15 yards away now! a machine gun opened up shooting right by me. all of a sudden my legged seemed to give up as I stopped in my tracks.<br />
My eyes were wide open, but I wasn&#8217;t focused on anything. I seemed to be just standing there not moving, out in the open, invincible, confused, and helpless. Regardless of what I was and ever had been I was helpless as the machine gun took a pass through me and every other man in the british army. looking up I saw the machine gun nest perched 60 yards off to the right and 40 yards above the main battle ground. Seemed almost unfair as i looked down  at my legs just to see the machine gun pass through<br />
me and every other man in the british army. looking up I saw the machine gun nest perched 60 yards off to the right and 40 yards above the main battle ground. Seemed almost unfair as i looked down  at my legs just to see the machine gun pass through me. A bullet ripped right through the left thigh and I finally stumbled to my left falling down, and into the fellow who had helped me up. How can one man have so much power. With that machine gun you could kill a whole regiment of charging men.<br />
We had fallen into eachother and onto the ground. He was dead, but i could now see his face. I think his name was &#8220;Alfred&#8221;. He had once brought me my dinner from the chow line.<br />
Looking ahead i couldn&#8217;t see much of the trench, but the fellows had entered it. I could see occasional muzzle flashes extruding the trench infront of me. The sergeant was underneath the Machine gun nest now. he seemed to throw a grenade into the nest, but it didn&#8217;t stop the gunner from firing until his inevitable death.<br />
There was a gas mask only feet from me. I tired to grab it but my arm wouldn&#8217;t extend far enough.<br />
The first line was mostly penetrated, and i could only here one machine gun off in the distance. We were now being held off by sporadic rifle fire and grenades. A sergeant and few soldiers were calling for grenades. After a while of frustration a soldier, Jeffrey, came running out to me to grab any grenades. I raised my hand and called out &#8220;Jeffrey! Help me Jeff&#8230;&#8221; He could not here me as he grabbed the grenade from alfreds&#8217; belt. On has he attempt to run back to the trench he was shot down by german sniper fire.<br />
He was hit twice in the chest and lie four feet or so in front of me. Smoke shells are falling now, and they are right on top of me! The second wave is coming! German artillery fire will be coming soon. the sergeant said there would be mustard gas!<br />
I have to get to the trench! The familar whizzing of german artillery was going by me. I lifted myself up and pushed forward a couple feet. A new machine gun had opened up above me. bullets where thrusting by me. The artillery fire, both British and German, machine guns, grenades, now aiplanes flying overhead, airplanes dropping bombs, yells of the sergeant and yells of the wounded was amazing and deafening. My push forward was all I could bare. The reality of my wounds was now blisteringly real. I was never going to make it to the trench. looking forward I realized I could now reach the gas mask, which had once been out of reach. I struggled to put it on, but the mustard gas shells were falling. Random german artillery was falling all around me.<br />
 I managed to get my head over my shoulder looking to the rear. Percipitation had built up on the small glass eye pieces. I could see just enough to make out the second wave.<br />
All the noise, and my lose of blood left me in a daze. it was all so confusing. my vision was blurry and i couldn&#8217;t focus on anything but the second wave seemed to be caring springfield rifles, yanks. I would rather not die next to a yank. I would like to die bravely side-by-side of a British soldier. Not like this, cut down by a German machine gun, this is not the proper way to die. How dare he blast that machine gun killing all these men.<br />
They looked grisly and battered. Their uniforms were a mess, rifles, equipment, packs, and gas masks they looked like something from a nightmare. Is this what they enlisted for? To become a charcter of a nightmare? All those mother&#8217;s and sisters back in London, Liverpool, Quebec, New York, and Washington! What would they think?<br />
As they walked passed me I was able to lift my hand enough to be noticed&#8230;<br />
I woke to the vibrations being pulled along the ground. I was laying in the trench now and unable to move. Soldiers were going by. The soldier that pulled my lifeless body in this ugly crowded place said &#8220;Don&#8217;t worry mate, we&#8217;re gonna&#8230;&#8221;<br />
I had been sleeping in my cott as the commander bursted in waking a few others and I &#8220;The british are advancing! Get up and Man your positions!&#8221; &#8220;Altmann Get on the damn machine gun&#8221; he said to me<br />
The last thing my wife said to me before i left for the hindenberg line was &#8220;I don&#8217;t believe this war is doing anyone good, but you are brave and I love you.&#8221; This made me proud to be a German soldier, but i was not prepared to slaughter so many men with this Maxim machine gun. Walking through these ugly god forsaken trenches is drooling. This place is hell, but yet heaven compared to the ground above.<br />
With my perch over the battlefield i could see through the smoke and was taking shots at the British 200 yards out and closing. I must have killed 70 men. Looking out at the advancing grounds was an horrid sight. All the artillery craters, barbed wire, and land mines littered this once innocent farm land.<br />
A grenade landed in my nest. Extinctively leaped from my position into the trench out of sheer self preservation. When I was at full attention to the situation I realized I had been badly burned by the grenade. The commander had swiftly manned the gun as quick as i had left it. Injured and crawling along the floor a friend named Gehrig came to my side. He started to walk me back to the rear. As we went along I looked back long enough notice to the commander shooting the gun off all the way until his inevitable death. I knew my Battle was over as Gehrig Left me by the nurses tent, but it would be long before I would be leaving here.<br />
oh and sorry you must bare with me as yahoo doesn&#8217;t accept Tabs</p>
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